Monday, 27 December 2010

There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

My second essay for the IELTS!
(I used all resource, spent a lot of time and review often. That is my first practice, I would like to have corrections from people who know the test)

There has a long presentation about the traditional and international music. People needs the music because is a very important way for the express their personals feelings and socials situations.

The traditional music is very important for keep the nationalist sentiments and the specific culture for a group of persons. This music´s style usually talks about a reality of a given population, and allow know a think way.  

However, the international music allows further the culture exchanger. Is a way to know the different situation around the world, helping the people feeling close up with others cultures and situations. The same way, this style of music talks about general feeling in the persons allowing find commonalities in people who have never met.

In this way, the international music have a lot of advantage, like it open the door a new style of music, allow developing of creativity in the persons, while the traditional music frequently  do not accept changes in the styles. This situation don´t permit the total opening of creativity on people and difficult the free emotions expressions.

On conclusion, the traditional music is very important for keep nationality sentiments and the specific cultures; however, the international music opens the door for new style of music and allows the emotion expression with free creativity.


  1. Introduction needs to asnwer why we need music and gives a look into the debate (as you did before)
    usually, when you are taking about "persons", it's used "people" not person ("a group of people")
    OJO with third person, singular, in verbs (the "s"), and singular-plural.
    "In conclusion" is a good expression to finish an essay. Very good!!!

  2. I like this kind of debate
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  3. I´ll take yours tips for my learning process!!!